Archive | October, 2013

Annoyed by bad structure.

13 Oct

By Darryl Ayo

Provocative headline, first paragraph supports headline’s claim, detail paragraphs seem to subvert those claims subtly, halfway through: the finer details of the author’s True Intent are revealed, finally, author doesn’t seem quite so extreme after all.

STOP. WRITING. THIS. ESSAY.

Say what you mean upfront. Use detail paragraphs to flesh out your intentions. Your conclusion is the same as your introduction, plus the knowledge that the reader understands the reasons for your assertion.

That’s how it’s done.

A lot of modern journalists, bloggers, essayists, writers are so fixated on this fallacy that they must provoke their readers and delay their essays’ thesis that they only succeed in provoking outrage.

One cannot insist “read the whole essay” when the writer is too coy or too dishonest to communicate to the reader in good faith without relying on incoherent provocations, misdirections and strawman arguments designed only to trick the reader or anger the reader (at which point, the “clever” writer unveils the truth of their intentions).

It is manipulative and it adds to an already-untenable culture of hyperbole, contrarianism, deceit and misinformation.

Always remember the adages about first impressions.

The first impression of your essay must be the truth of your convictions. Even using your cleverest rhetorical reversals, readers’ lingering impressions will be your initial statement of your essay.

Maybe because most writers are figuring it out as they write. First draft, stream of consciousness, no real editing. It’s one thing to struggle to a conclusion but it’s quite another to ask your unfortunate readers to struggle with you as you make up your mind about what you believe.

Tighten up, writer.

@darrylayo

No slouch

10 Oct

By Ayo

The Shaolin Cowboy, no. 1
By Geof Darrow with Dave Stewart
October, 2013
Dark Horse Comics

To the best of my recollection, I’ve never read a Geof Darrow comic book. I’ve seen his art a thousand times, I’ve read comics where he had contributed a single illustration (cover, pinup) but I’m not certain if I have ever seen Darrow’s pages. Until the Year of Our Lord, 2013, mid-October.

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Bright and early in the morning…

8 Oct

By Ayo

A friend whose name is redacted sent me a snide message on Facebook:

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To keep my wheels turning, I ask the good citizens of tumblr to use the “ask box” feature to give me questions. These questions are generally fantastic.

Please feel free to ask me questions any time: http://darrylayo.tumblr.com/ask

For reference, I live and work in New York City. I do most of my writing on my smartphone. That’s the life that I lead. I write lots of the material for Comix Cube and for my tumblr blog while riding the train or while walking down the street. I have excellent peripheral vision.

So now that I’ve cleared that up, on with the show. The following quote is a question (or an “ask”) that an anonymous tumblr user sent to me. After the quote is my response. For reference, my train to work actually got stalled so I had a lot more time than usual to write. Here we go:

“Where do you think the line of not working hard enough exists for an artist? Going to college, having a job, and various social obligations really takes up my time and energy so when the end of the day comes along I just sleep or draw weak-looking sketches. Then I remember other artists make sure to finish a picture a week along with studies everyday and I feel lazy in comparison.”

If I can convince artists of nothing else, I hope to show people: draw in the morning. You will fail at night. You will not succeed at making things in the night. Here’s why.

When you wake up in the morning after an appropriate amount of sleep, your body is refreshed, recharged, renewed. Your ideas are fresher, your troubles are calmed, you are simply healthier in body and mind.

But that’s not the main advantage!

During the course of a day, any given day, your life’s activities and pressures and stressors will gather and accumulate. When you go to work or go to class or go to meet your friends or just sit in your room, things happen which add to your responsibilities, obligations and stresses.

Example: you want to draw at night. You go to class at school and have a difficult time with a quiz. You know you’ve bombed it and you just feel down all day.

Example: you want to draw at night. You get a text message from your significant other that says “We Need To Talk.”

Example: you want to draw at night. But it’s game night and you want to hang out with your friends! And you should.

Example: you want to draw at night. Before you can get settled in, your manager calls in a panic because the closing shift person quit unexpectedly.

Example: you want to draw at night. Nothing bad has happened to you all day but you are just exhausted! You have school and/or a job and/or friends and/or that news report has absorbed your attention and/or your significant other ❤ and/or you've been on your feet all day and/or you're Just Tired and/or you need to buy groceries and/or it's your turn to make dinner and/or your out-of-touch friend called you out of the blue and you're reminiscing and/or You Just Don't Want To!

Give up on the night. You know what I'm doing tonight? Probably not drawing! I think I'll have dinner with a friend or go on a coffee date or try to catch up on television or read one of the graphic novels on my stack of books or read one of the prose books that I've been avoiding. I don't feel any urgency to draw tonight.

I did my day's drawing before 8:05am. I'm off-duty.

"I'm not a morning person!"

So what? Make yourself into a morning person. Retrain your mind. Retrain your body. You're a human being, you're adaptable. Set your alarm earlier and go to bed at a reasonable hour. Leave the night life to the people who don't have stuff to do.

Now, then:

You want to draw a picture per week? It ain't a prob at all, my friend! Here's your schedule. Change the details based on what your details are. I work a 9-to-5 job. Forty hours per week, Monday through Friday.

Monday morning: sketch. Doodle. Just scribble in your sketchbook or copy pictures from magazines.

Tuesday morning: looking over your sketches from Monday, you have some ideas forming. Do some thumbnail layouts and practice the picture composition.

Wednesday morning: by now you are selecting your final composition and perhaps doing a basic sketch on the final paper or canvas or computer document (don't forget to save)

Thursday morning: pick up where you left off and keep drawing your final document.

Friday morning: you're almost there!

Saturday (whatever is closest to a day off for you) : FINISH IT!!!!

Sunday (assuming that you have two consecutive days off or with a lighter workload) : lay loose. Chill out and go hang out with your friends. Teach yourself to dance or go on a bike ride. Gather your strength to resume the cycle…

Monday morning: et cetera…

Get it? Got it? Good!!

@darrylayo

The Wheel Turns…

7 Oct

By Darryl Ayo

“Once Upon A Time…” Chapter One
Hinterkind, no. 1
By Ian Edginton & Francesco Trifogli
With: Dezi Sienty & Cris Peter
And: Greg Tocchini

The first thing of note to occur in Hinterkind number one is on the second page when the protagonist Prosper Monday jumps out of the brush and shoots a zebra. Artist Francesco Trifogli uses a repeating-image of the hunter Prosper superimposed over a still environment to indicate not only her precise movements through space but also to imply the speed and clarity of her action. It’s an old comics trick but it’s a trick that I like. It requires more work and it telegraphs to the audience that the artist isn’t shy to put extra effort in when the situation warrants. That was on page two. Got my attention.

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